Aircraft stability and control parameters
The audience of the document that contained the extract are learners of aviation. The audience was learning how to enhance aircraft stability and factors that might result in its instability aboard. The article then identified ice on the aircraft tail as one of the factors that might make the airplane to get unstable.
The organization of the paragraph needs a little change for it to make sense to its audience better. Some sentences in the section do not make sense, and the reader might have to struggle to understand it. As an editor, one would need to change the alignment of the words in the paragraph to make the message clearer. For instance, an editor needs to improve the sentences’ completeness and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and object that links well. Additionally, the paragraph has not used elements of language like articles and conjunctions.
To make the paragraph more logical, I changed the topic sentence to read, “from the results that were presented, we can conclude that presence of ice on aircraft tail has a significant effect its stability as well as the control parameters.” This change would make the sentence to be self-explanatory and have a definite meaning. I would also change the first effect to read, ” The ice affects the logitudinal stability of an aircraft significantly.”
I would also change the second effect to read, “Ice contamination reduced the horizontal tail’s maximum-lift and lift-curve slope; therefore, it decreased the airplane’s pitching moment capability. The change will make the sentence more clear by identifying the subject. The third effect should be, “the contamination also reduced the control of elevator and rudder.” the change would make it possible for one to know the effect of the ice on rudder and elevator control. The last sentence makes sense on itself, and there would be no need to change it. The author passes a message that the presence of ice makes the airplane have less kinetic pressure making it unstable.